My 100 word piece for this weeks fab Flash Fictioneers photo prompt. Photo by Claire Fuller.
The white lady watches from atop an old stone coffin alongside the porch. When the black veil of dusk shadows the earth she wakens and walks, searching in vain. She gave birth in the church yard, alone and afraid and died at the hands of men never known. Her young body was found with a rope around her neck and a small woollen blanket lay empty at her side. The child was never found, some say it was gypsies who stole the babe away and others say her family buried their shame. Yet she searches every night for the child that she lost.
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Love it – both chilling and poignant (the small woollen blanket – perfect pathos). Astonished by what you’ve packed into 100 words.
Thanks. 100 words is hard, lol 🙂
Hi Helen,
lovely poetic devices here too. Have a good weekend.
Regards Talia
Thank you, you too 🙂
The saddest story beautifully retold. Let’s hope she finds peace and rest some day.
You write such good thriller pieces and horror making it mysterios without being too frightening and gory.
Thanks, I’m still a sucker for darkness, lol. I’m heading over to your site to check out the casting 🙂
Stop by and see my casting call for Red Clay and Roses.
You’ve packed so much of the woman’s life in to your 100 words, and left me wanting to know so much more. A great read.
Thank you 🙂
Hi Helen,
Great ghost story with a good backstory, always important in such a macabre tale. Very spooky! Ron
Thanks 🙂
Helen, brilliant and haunting. I like the image of The White Lady overlooking the church yard from above.
Thank you, I think every graveyard has its own white lady or some story like it 🙂
Such a brief piece and you do so much with it. Nicely told heartbreak. Love it!
Thank, I love the challenge of only 100 words 🙂
So sad!
Dear Helen,
A chilling take on the prompt. The empty woolen blanket is a great touch. Well done.
Aloha,
Doug
Thank you, the photo seems to be generating more dark tales than lighter ones this week 🙂
Dear Helen,
A poignant tale with a ballad quality about it.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you, I thought the piece had a certain rhythm to it as well 🙂
Very touching story.
For a 100 word piece, I absolutely loved it! I was drawn in from the beginning…I love your site…It gives me prompts and ideas for my writings. Thank you!!!
Thanks, I love the 100 word fiction prompts. They really make you think, getting you to cut out the crap and tighten up a story. I’m working my way through your stuff, I’m liking so far, lol 🙂
Thank you, how do I join this? I would love too…Sometimes it’s hard for me to cut the fat, then I start cutting too much. I need to get to the point myself….I am working through your’s too and liking everything I am reading too…lol 🙂
Thanks for liking, I haven’t been on wordpress long so still a newbie really. You can click on the link on the white lady piece ‘Friday Fictioneers’. There is a picture posted every week, you then post on your blog and copy and paste the address into the link on the Fictioneers page. The pics been coming up on a wednesday lately, instead of Fridays. Give it a go, its a great challenge 🙂
Np, I am a newbie too, It’s been a week or so for me. I sure will take a stab at it…I am excited!!! Thanks again…
Great! Thank you…I have been saying I am going to get back to writing and it’s about time…I welcome the challenge. Thanks again Helen.