Time again for the highly compulsive Friday Fictioneers. A 100 word photo prompt from the ever creative Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. Have a look at the other 100 or so addicted creations offered up each week.
Some memories linger; leaving a taste, a scent or a trace of something more. Others fade into the ether, tiny particles of nothing that float in the air. It was easy to forget the nights they ate tapas or the charm of the old quarter. The feel of warm sand that glistened under-foot or the balmy scented moonlight that promised so much more. It was harder to forget the tears and recriminations, the gunshot that pierced his chest, the sirens, the headlines and the jury of twelve. If only he’d seen the sign hanging across her cold blackened heart – No Trespassing.
i like this take on the prompt.. the idea of the no trespassing sign on someone’s heart. all those wonderful things they got going on at the beginning, made me feel sorry for your protagonist
Thanks, and yes poor guy 😉
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Very atmospheric, very powerful. Well done.
Thanks Sandra 🙂
Really, there’s so much under the surface of this story. Obsession, violence, love/lust unrequited? And memories that “fade into the ether, tiny particles of nothing that float in the air.” Such a beautiful line.
I like this story’s ambiguity and almost abstract nature — a memory.
Thank you, glad you liked 😉
Great story – I particularly liked your description of memory.
Cheers 🙂
Excellent take Helen, I really enjoyed this one. I like that it operates on a few different levels, well done.
Thanks 🙂
Wouldn’t life be so much easier if everyone had truthful signs on their hearts? Really well-conceived and written story, Helen.
janet
A unique interpretation of the prompt, and a very effective one. Well done!!!!
Dear Helen,
This puts me in mind of a line from Chicago about firing six warning shots…into his head. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
What a clever take. A punchy little piece.
I found this to be powerfully moving.
Ooh I like that. Having trespassed unknowingly myself, I can feel the shot still stuck in my own chest.
Really good riff on the photograph with a well orchestrated shift in mood.
Well written and a little sad!:-)
Sad and a bit chilling. Nice use of the prompt, especially the “no trespassing” sign.
this works so well with the picture.. really a very creative take..
I love how you interpreted this.
Great take, Helen. No trespassing of the heart. I like that. I was enjoying the balmy beginning, and stopped cold with your ending. Your story was an emotional roller coaster.
That’s the trouble with passion, you can’t just dip a toe in. Jump in and prepare for wildness! Great story, Helen.
Love it!
I’ve read this atmospheric tale a few times. Your lead character’s looking back. A jealous psycho lover kills her new love so he can’t have any other relationship? I like my interpretation anyway! Lovely ambience and language use.
This was such an imaginative take on the prompt! I really like the metaphor that surprises the reader at the end.