Haibun Thinking Challenge – Reflection

This is written for the very  first Haibun Thinking challenge.

I have used the prompt below – 

“Life moves pretty fast. If you don’t stop and look around once in a while, you could miss it.”

– Ferris Bueller’s Day Off

She looks in the mirror not recognising the face that stares back. Oh, there’s a familiarity alright, a sense of something or someone long gone, but there’s no real connection to the profile looking back. An echo of laughter plays in her head, she smiles. The face in the mirror smiles too, blood red lips that glisten in anticipation. They’re full and rounded, pumping with life; lips to be kissed, to be plundered with passion. And a smile so wide it reaches her eyes. Where blue orbs of mystery are so deep even the water nymphs would drown.

The laughter fades away, replaced by a gentle sway of rhythm. The blue orbs darken into something more, something wild and untamed. Music fills the air and the reflection begins to move, a slow burning flame that dances in the fire. She watches as hands glide over smooth unblemished skin, touching, teasing, and claiming. She sighs, the reflection stalls.

Shadows ebb across the glass, a mist tinged veil colours the edges of the reflection looking back. Her lips become thin and pale against a grey pallid skin and those blue eyes now faded are hidden by the deep lines of age. The reflection recoils at the face looking in. For the reflection is no stranger, but the woman she used to be.

 

Yesterday is gone,

Today will follow swiftly,

Then tomorrow comes.

25 thoughts on “Haibun Thinking Challenge – Reflection

  1. Excellent Helen and welcome to Haibun Thinking. The idea you express of looking in mirrors is one we all deal with, every day, who is that stranger looking back at me? Great start to writing Haibuns and your haiku is very good as well. Hope to see you back next week.

  2. Ferris and I go way back, darling — nice of you to spread his wisdom. Strange that you took a line from a comedy and wrote something so P-word. (the p-word being poignant, darling, but it gets thrown around so often that I hesitate to use it outright — doesn’t poignant strike you as something of a sharp word that oughtn’t be tossed around so much? Someone’s likely to get hurt.)
    At any rate, dear Helen, you inspire me with your desire to stretch yourself.

      • I watch it every year on my birthday — I was so happy — a couple of years ago, a local movie theatre brought it back — every month they show an old movie — so I got to see it on the big screen again.
        I understand the desire to stretch artistically — I took a poetry class a couple of years ago and was forced to learn about all kinds of styles I’d never even heard of.

  3. Wow that is fantastic. You can see her looking in the mirror and the smile fading.

    Can I ask a favour? Can you add your link into the blue frog thingy? It adds you to the list and more people will come to read your post. With one like this, it deserves more people seeing it. As summerstommy said, you started great. with the whole idea of it. Hope to see you back next week, and thank you for taking part.

    • Thank you. I tried to add to the linky thats on the page but when I click on it I just get a load of writing explaining about links. Should I be adding it somewhere else? sorry if I’m being really stupid 🙂

      • It’s okay. Don’t click on the writing, click on the creature. I think I will change the writing underneath to explain it more. That’s what I did the first time I did it as well lol

  4. This is your first haibun?? Honestly? hahaha This is wonderful. The prose is so vivid and finished up so nicely with a beautiful haiku. Loved it!

  5. So glad you joined the rest of us at Haibun Thinking. I tend to break rules. But Al has a very nice explanation of what haibun are supposed to be. The prose and or poetry plus the haiku together make the haibun. And you did a stellar job!

    Thanks for your visit to my piece.

  6. I would like to meet the folks who originally think up conventions like Haibun. Just when one gets comfortable putting words together there is another challenge out there. So well done Helen. This discussion was good as well.

  7. Very moving piece. I can relate to your words. I look at myself in the mirror lately with great surprise. Is that really me? Yep, definite resemblance. Deep sigh for mis-spent youth. No wait, I enjoyed my youth…

  8. Congratulations on your first ‘bun..it is well delivered and I felt the wistful flavour of the writing wash over me. Good stuff.

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