Friday Fictioneers time again. A weekly 100 word photo prompt hosted by the delightful Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. I have to admit my inspirations flagging a bit this week, so am looking forward to the other masterful creations to spur my creative juices back into shape. Get yourself over, follow the link and have a go.
They walked along the path, their hands almost touching. A sense of anticipation caught in the air, like a thousand tiny light bulbs flickering in the wind,
Are you sure?
I think so,
I have to,
No you don’t, just do it,
What do you mean, then what?
When we’ve done it,
You’re going to do it?
Oh…I don’t know, I didn’t think that far ahead,
You never do,
That’s not fair,
I know, I’m sorry,
It’s ok to be scared you know,
Sure, it is.
Nah, I’m no virgin, I’ve been hang-gliding for years.
25 thoughts on “Flying Without Wings”
LOL you totally got me there. nice smooth dialogue. 🙂
Nice twist. haha
WAH WAH WAAAAAAAH… goes the muted trumpet. I’m with KZ… you got me.
Ha! Great twist ending 🙂
It’s normal to have cold feet just before the jump.
Hang gliding is a metaphor right? Ha! I know what is really going on here. I loved the pace throughout the piece and the sudden left at the end of the story.
See…you could write something inspired. Thank you, Silent
Hah, that twist had me smiling 🙂
Oh I love that feeling. So rare. Really liked how you wove it into the picture and took us for a ride before the event.
Nice set up and twist. I understand the apprehension. I’m afraid of heights. 😉
What’s funny is that I was totally thinking of cliff-diving the whole time, and it wasn’t until I got to the end that I was like, “OH! It was supposed to sound like something else!”
I’m either naive or the fact I was looking at a mountain made me think of jumping. Funny stuff!
Loved the dialogues and the fun twist in the end-end to “sinful thoughts” 😉
Good one, Helen. Your dialogue brings out their characters very well.
I hope they enjoyed it;)
Good story and dialogue. A great twist at the end I’ll leaving hang gliding to others. I don’t like standing near an open window in a tall building.
I know. I left out the period after the word “end”.
Ah. that was a nice surprise.. really good.
Nice twist at the end! Totally not what I thought it was going to be. And then such sass at the end!
Ha ha! Nice twist, Helen. I didn’t expect that one.
Now, that is one sport that I enjoy watching from the ground but only if I don’t know the glider…scary! Good write ha me wondering there for a moment!
Great build up. Let’s fly again.
The dialogue was so tight, so real, that you could have gone almost anywhere with this, Helen. Love where you took us! 😉