Another stab at MINDLOVEMISERY’S weekly photo Shadorma prompt. I’m trying to come away from my usual rhyming format and this is great practice. I may only be an amateur but you gotta love a girl for trying.
For those that don’t know a Shadorma is composed of six non-rhyming lines (sestina or sextet) and the syllable pattern is 3-5-3-3-7-5. It can have as many stanzas as you like, just as long as each stanza follows the syllable pattern mentioned above .
This week has an added extra of a shape poem called a laturne poem … the shape a Japanese lantern! It has 5 lines with the syllable count is 1-2-3-4-1. So here goes….
Threads of life,
On a fallen leaf,
Etched in time,
Set in deep,
Woven threads of history,
Float like air and dust,
*
Threads of life,
As the seasons change,
Summer sun,
Autumn rain,
Woven threads of memory,
Scattered on the ground.
*
Threads of life,
As the winter comes,
Hidden vein,
Hidden life,
Woven threads of mystery,
Buried beneath the snow.
* * * * * *
Leaf
And life,
Woven threads,
Weep as nature,
Dies.
Lovely:) beautiful writing.
Beautifully executed! I lke the repetition of the first line throught out the poem and your lanturne conclusion is perfect! Thanks for participating!
I agree with Georgia — the repetition works incredibly well, and the form is perfect! It has a wonderful Sara Teasdale feel to it — and I like it very much! You call yourself “amateur” but in my humble opinion this is *not* an amateur effort. Brava!