Wednesday already and time for my Friday treat, well Friday Fictioneers anyway. A 100 words of fiction based around the photo provided. Follow the link and jump on in.
Photo Copyright : Melanie Greenwood
You asked me once if I’d tell you my secret. You said you could sense it, buried, hidden beneath my shadows. You said you knew me.
You were wrong.
You said the truth would leave a trail, lead me out of the maze, that the truth would clear the pathways and open doors I’d never seen.
You were wrong.
I’d seen what the truth could offer; seen friendship turn to anger and laughter turn to hate and I’d seen the faces cower as they turned and walked away.
So please don’t ask again, not if you want to love me!
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DJ
Thank you 🙂
I like this. Hard hitting.
Thanks 🙂
Great stuff, very powerful.
Cheers, I’d drunk up all the Lucozade 😉
Indeed truths can be even more devastating than lies.. sometimes silence is the best way.
Very true, thanks for reading 🙂
Ah . . . an age-old story set against other age-old wisdom. Will the truth set you free or not? It all depends on the nature of those to whom the truth is told.
Cheers!
MG
This spoke to me.
Dear Helen, Great story and creepy! Good job! Nan 🙂
Very clever. Tells you everything while telling you nothing.
xxx Huge Hugs xxx
Often Tact is better than Truth. Well done. 🙂
That is some secret she’s guarding. Good one.
Dear Helen,
You hit the nail on the head. Assumptions and secrets can take a toll on a relationship, be it romantic or not. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Wonderful take on the prompt
Reminds me of that saying, “If I tell you I have to kill you.” Very emotional/powerful.
I want to know the secret!! Very intriguing story 🙂
i’d say a woman is entitled to keep her secrets. it’s part of her charms. besides, what he doesn’t know won’t hurt him anyway.
Wow. Strong stuff. Well done!
Interesting and deep. It’s as if you’ve written not so much a story about the maze but the maze puts your story into “view” and your story explains a deeper meaning to the image. I’d say they compliment each other. And the depth of your concept is appreciated as well, it’s thought provoking.
🙂
Some things are better left inside our heads and unsaid. Great job, Helen.
It’s interesting that he sensed the secret ‘beneath her shadow’. I wonder how he could tell. I really like the tone of this, and the ending is great – do we choose to love?
It’s hard to know when the truth is best left untold. Only the individual who holds the secret can decide. The truth itself has been known to destroy something that was once simple and beautiful. A powerful and thought provoking piece and very well written.
Oh wow. What amazing portrayal.
I wonder what this person’s asking to know?
Ellespeth