My weekly fix of Friday Fictioneers, a 100 words of fiction based on the weekly photo prompt. For me the challenge isn’t just about the word count but trying new styles, new stories, new voices. Some work better than others, some I’ll carry forward, some I’ll never use again, but you don’t know till you try and you’ve gotta love a trier……..
Original Photo : Roger Bultot
7.15pm Finishes work – Jade green coat with a fake fur trim.
7.23pm Leaves underground carpark– A scent of jasmine lingers in the lift.
7.45pm Stops at store – A bottle of Merlot and a soft brown baguette.
8.02pm Pulls into garage – Key under pot, no one ever learns.
8.25pm Light in bedroom – Matching bra and panties.
8.30pm Light in bathroom – Steam obscures view.
8.44pm Reaches for towel – Speckles of water on alabaster skin.
8.46pm Knife raised high – Blood flows clockwise.
9.15pm Oven turned on – Sweet smell of gas.
9.17pm Cigarette in bin – I close the door behind me.
9.21pm BOOM – Time to say goodbye!
Some stalker!
Scary stuff: well done.
Holy smokes (if you’ll pardon the expression)! Is every Friday Fictioneer but me, a psychopathic murderer?? I’ll be under my bed until it’s time to read more great stories like this next week. 🙄
Excellent, both conception and presentation.
Sinister !
I agree about trying new styles.. this one was like one of those connect the dots drawing that you did as a kid. I love new styles too, and I agree sometimes you need to do something entirely new..
Dear Helen,
Be right back. Have to change the hiding spot of my house key. Wonderful presentation and format and a nasty MC.
Aloha,
Doug
Wow, dark and creepy stuff! If the police find this journal I’m sure they’ll be able to close quite a few cases.
The timings add that sinister aspect to the story, scary stuff.
Scary….stories like this is why I never leave a key outside. Nice format!
That was creepy!
This is one successful experiment, I love the style. Very creepy and scary. Great take on the prompt, boom.
Dear Helen,
Methodically well done. Interesting format.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Diary of a Mad Afterwork Killer.
I hope the Merlot and Baguette did not go to waste.
Had some visions of of Tony Perkins and Psycho here, too.
Randy
Oh my, Helen!! Dark and creepy this week. Excellent. I think this format reveals the meticulous nature of your character. It was all accomplished in just a little over 2 hours. I was a bit stuck on the baguette and wine… I must be hungry. 🙂
I totally agree with your idea of trying out new stuff – and this really works. I love it when I have to work it out, go back over the evidence. You leave a chilling trail fro us to follow.
PS If I ever commit a murder they’ll be a note traced back to me where I misspelled the word for! Always do that!
Helen, How many ways can you say brilliant? You are just fabulously clever and I’m not kidding! I love the way you wrote this! Excellent! Nan
I loved this. The format made it especially creepy and chilling!
Yikes. Suspenseful and shocking. I love the style you used – perfect for the story.
Original and scary. Works really well.
Well that was a short lived romance. I think the relationship needed more spontaneity. He was too tied to the clock.