This weeks entry to Friday Fictioneers. A 100 words (or there abouts) of fiction based on the weekly photo prompt provided. Follow the link to read and participate.
Photo Copyright : Roger Bultot
She was sat on the step. Rain hood tipped back, framing her face, hugging a doll tightly to her chest.
“I told Dr Smith, Sarah would do it” she said in a detached whisper.
Sgt. Reynolds took her hands, against the thickness of his, hers were soft and small.
He wanted to say something, but couldn’t.
Her lemon cotton dress was stained with blood. Its heavy scent caught in his throat.
“Sarah said I didn’t need Mummy anymore”
He sat looking at her. Electricity sizzled in the wet air.
“Where is Sarah now” he asked.
She opened her arms and silently passed him the doll.
“Hello Sarah” he sighed.
Wow. That’s a lot of grimness to pack into 100 words. Well done
Thanks. Yes I’ve gone a bit dark this week, maybe its the weather 😉
Very creepy. I love it! 🙂
Thanks, its good to go dark sometimes 🙂
Very sinister indeed.
Thanks for reading, yes bit darker than my usual take on things 🙂
Very dark indeed 🙂
Not sure why but the dark side called this week 😉
Very dark. I like this!
Thanks 🙂
What a grim, tragic tale! It moved me deeply, with all of the psychological breakdown that is implied. A stunning story.
Thanks for the great comment 🙂
You’re most welcome!
Somehow I anticipated Sarah might be the doll. I’ve got three granddaughters. Maybe I better box up all the dolls lying around at our house.
Whoa! Nice ending! Makes the whole story creepier still. The Midge has done it again.
Wonderful, Helen! 🙂
Dolls are always creepy to me, Helen. This one worked for me! I like the lemon dress. It contrasts nicely with blood. Well done.
Well done creepiness Helen! I knew Sarah was the doll…makes you wonder what else she made her “mistress” do… *shudder!
Your story told me of someone so young, with such a tortured mind. Great and grim writing just like the prompt. Well done
Very creepy doll and scary child. Great atmosphere too. I don’t envy Sgt. Reynolds.
This is the material nightmares are made from… Splendid
Disturbingly excellent!
This is what great flash should be. The brevity really concentrates the horror.
Creepy, Sgt. Reynolds better hope that Sarah likes him.
Grim and scary indeed. Dolls can be strangely sinister considering how they’re generally supposed to be cute toys.
Ooooh, i’ve got goosebumps from reading this! The first line is very descriptive and sets the scene beautifully, but we are quickly taken down a very dark road with a very disturbing tale. Well done