Time again for Friday Fictioneers. A 100 words of fiction based, as close or as loose as you like, around the photo prompt provided. This weeks effort is a little lighter, it may not last 😉
Photo Copyright : Piya Singh
“Pass my marble box, Jimmy” she asked shewing an imaginary cat away from the chair and sitting down.
“Ave ye got a bamboozler Gran?” he asked excitedly
“No”
“Ave ye got a cat’s eye?”
“No”
“Hav ye got any doublers?”
“No Jimmy”
He swiped his dripping nose across his sleeve “Ye aint got much, have you Gran?”
“Use a hanky” she scolded
“I’m savin ye a job, you’d only afta wash it”
She tried to hide a smile.
“They’re not real marbles Jimmy, it’s where I keep my memories”
He shrugged and moved closer.
“Mam said you’ve lost yer marbles, Gran”
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I have a feeling that Jimmy never had any marbles to loose…. but the closure was a great one.
His marbles may be with mine 😉
That was a wonderful comic ending – out of the mouths of babes and sucklings! By the way, did you intend to say shewing rather than shooing and scalded (which I rather liked) rather than scolded?
Shewing was intentional, scalded purely bad spelling, lol. Thanks for the pick up (I’ve amended) 😉
I liked the way this flows and you offer Some great images, but mam should mind what she says.
Thanks for reading Mike 🙂
Gosh this is sweet. And funny. And the dialect adds terrifically to it. Good job, Helen.
Hello Stranger, many thanks for the comment 🙂
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That was a delightfully told story, Helen – the language, the interchange, the charming double-entendre, the accidental dropping of an insult spoken by another – all lovely!
This dialogue pleased me greatly:
‘He swiped his dripping nose across his sleeve “Ye aint got much, have you Gran?”
“Use a hanky” she scolded
“I’m savin ye a job, you’d only afta wash it’
Thanks for such a great comment 🙂
Explosion of coffee over the laptop time! 🙂
Thanks for reading Sandra 🙂
Nice take on the expression “losing your marbles” 🙂
Some of us having been missing them a while 😉
Funny and well told, Helen.
Thanks 🙂
Strange that, while others laughed, I found this inexpressibly sad.
And I thought it was great.
Thank you 🙂
Best ending line I’ve read today! This was keenly written with humor acting as a balm against (As CE said) the sadness inherent in aging. Nicely done.
Thanks 🙂
I so look forward to old age. All the pleasures. new marble names for me. Lovely language – the words trip off the tongue.
Thanks 🙂
Very funny, Helen. I like the bit about saving her a job. Great voice and exchange. It feels very close and intimate.
Cracking ending and nice interplay between the generations.
I enjoyed the dialogue.
Delightful story, Helen. Very good dialogue, too. I love it!
Very entertaining – the voices, the marble names, the interplay between the two and the terrific ending.
This made me smile. That’s one feisty grandmother. Lost her marbles… she’ll show them. And what a brat of a grandson.