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The lamplight flickered in the lengthening shadows. Pushing the door behind me, I let it fall back on its hinges, closing. The tap, tap, tap of a branch on an opened window, the gurgle and hiss of the radiator pipes; sounds both real and imaginary filled the chasm of fear in my head. I sat myself down on the chair, impatiently drumming my fingers on the faded leather arm. The ferry was still docked at the quayside. Escape beckoned, I could leave. The pain fixed me where I was. There was nothing left to do, except to sit here and wait for the dentist.
18 thoughts on “Waiting”
There really is no escape from the dentist—you captured the anxiety and apprehension really well!
“We’ve all been there,” is a phrase that’s probably over-used and, more than likely, a lie half the time. That said… we’ve all been there.
Been there done that. Yup they are the doctors we love to hate.
Pain does act like a motivator at times! 🙂
Helen, When you find a good dentist, they’re a jewel. However, it’s still not something people look forward to. Well written with great description. 🙂 —Susan
Oh, to be anywhere but the dentist’s chair!
aloha Helen. exactly. the push pull of pain and anticipation. and the exaggerated sense of that wait. exactly. aloha.
I like the tension your character feels and the thought of escape before giving in to the inevitable.
You got that spot on! I feel your pain.
Dang! A trip ruined by dental pain. What a rub – especially when the ferry is still in sight.. Well done.
Only that ache can keep you in that chair.. yes I can sympathize with the feeling
I think you have caught that exact moment of thought of everyone who has sat in a dental chair… right before the dentist enters.
Run run, while you have the chance. This is how I feel when I walk up the stairs to my dentist. Help! Well done, Helen.
Do I detect bathos here? Several ways to read this. Dentists!
You put me in the chair, sweating with anticipation. To quote Sandra, “Spot on.”
I’m really late this week, Helen, but glad I had some time today! I really like the way you painted a scene here that builds tension– not different than the actual wait in a dentist’s chair, for many of us, but leaves us in a safe place… waiting. Nice job.
Dear Helen, You literally made my teeth ache with your descriptions! Very well done and I know what it’s like to be there. Have a great week Helen, Good JOB! Nan 🙂