Another week, another Friday Fictioneers. A 100 word (give or take) fiction prompt based on the photo provided. It’s fun, it’s clean, it’s both eclectic and electric. Get yourselves over and join the fun.
Photo Copyright : Ted Strutz
Ricochets of light echoed off half-empty glasses as flashes of colour shimmied across the bar; dancing flares of red, of amber, of burgundy and oak.
She watched him. The overhead lights flickering on and off, every alteration revising the one before. One minute highlighting the smooth angled edge to his jaw, the next, a shadowy mask darkening across his eyes.
In the corner, she drank, the subtle burn of whiskey diluting her anxiety. He walked towards her. She looked up. He raised his hand. She smiled. He walked passed her. She stilled.
As he kissed the girl behind, she felt the lights go out one by one.
helen midgley 
Ricochets of light echoed off half-empty glasses as flashes of colour shimmied across the bar; dancing shafts of red, of amber, of burgundy and oak.
This line is absolutely gorgeous. The whole scene ignites hope then BOOM! Well done.
Thanks for the lovely comment 🙂
Dear Helen, You really know how to set a scene perfectly. Your talent is so wonderful but I bet you could make it in Screen Plays too! Excellent! Nan 🙂
Ahh, thanks Nan 🙂
I know that feeling. It hits you in the gut.
Thanks for reading Dawn 🙂
😦 – not the ending we hope for at the single’s bar. Fantastic first paragraph, Helen.
Ellespeth
Thanks Ellespeth 🙂
Such a vivid description I felt I was there.
Thanks for commenting 🙂
Beautifully descriptive. I felt for the woman, we’ve all been there 🙂
Yep, unfortunately we have 😉
Loved your descriptions of the lights and colour, that create such an atmosphere of expectation, that the knock back becomes so strong and cutting.
Thanks 🙂
Beautiful descriptions. It made me think of lightening striking. Possibly the “sparks” of love, then the big fall. Stupid guy.
Too many ‘stupid’ guys out there, lol 😉
I love your description of color in the first paragraph. It definitely says bar scene and the feeling is in there, too. I like this abstract take. Nicely done, Helen.
Thanks for the great comment 🙂
Love the atmosphere.. and the story.. how often we are faced with those false hopes of nearly making it. Involving the senses and poetic language always make it for me.
False hope is better than no hope 😉
This had life jumping from the page. Great story.
Thank you 🙂
Oh nooooo
Unfortunately, Oh yes 😉
that was a surprise lol, i literally said “oh no” out loud x
Dear Helen,
You set up the scene beautifully with your use of light and color, then you dashed my hopes and left me in darkness. Good job!
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks Rochelle 🙂
Excellent! Many of the FF posts have been bleak, but this one… 🙂
Such a big, dazzling buildup and then to have her hopes shattered. Poor girl – maybe she should try online dating instead, easier on the nerves. Loved the story.
Helen, you set the scene so beautifully with such vivid descriptions that I was sure we were heading for a happy ending, but no, like the girl in your story, my hopes were dashed.
You have such a deft touch, your stories and poems are always a pleasure to read.
Dee