Time again for the fabulous Friday Fictioneers. A 100 words of fiction based around the photo prompt provided. The most fun you can have with your clothes on….
Photo Copyright : The Reclining Gentleman
The headlights in front blurred. The wipers useless against the deluge, as bullets of water pummelled the roof, echoing round the cab.
Nothing but static on the radio………..
The rain eased. He could hear his breathing again. A single bead of sweat teased down his back, pooling at the base of his spine.
Clammy hands gripped the steering-wheel.
Twisting the dial again…. still nothing….
Crackle… a noise….. faint…..
The headlines next day said ‘Body found, ransom never paid. Go-between and
£500,000 swept away in the storm’
He folded the paper, smiled and ordered another margarita.
16 thoughts on “The Go-Between”
Bad choice for a go-between, seems he is not so trustworthy.
Great story! The storm came at a very fortuitous moment for this cunning chap.
A very devious messenger. And hopefully with something on his conscience when he gets round to thinking about it.
fantastic – love it!
Wow. Great buildup of tension and (false) expectations. Loved the turn around at the end.
“bullets of water pummelled the roof” Such a great description to really set the stage for this dark tale.
Excellent, hope he enjoys the fruits of his labor, Karma is a bitch, and judgement day – Hell!
O god let the the go-between choke on mintleaves in the margeritha
Great descriptive writing. Well done, Helen, as always!
Love the twist and got a big chuckle out of your intro: ‘most fun you can have with your clothes on’–lol.
Great tension in this – that single bead of sweat teasing – that builds to the surprise ending. Really good.
I like how the water keeps it all together while washing everything away. Great story.
Yeah, some great building of suspense here – with that twist ending…fantastic.
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